Draft Feedback

i thought it was Mystery, i thought they were looking for the tape?

this could be made more clearer by different length of shots, it wasn't very clear what you were looking for. you could fix the lighting better to make suspense. i also thought there was too many close ups.

Genre: Horror

Narrative (character, what they’re looking for):  There is a girl who looking for a way to kill her sister

Is the narrative clear: I think it could be improved 

Feedback: Hopefully when the finish it will be more clearer, need to make sure the shot is in horizontal 

genre - thriller

narrative - they could of used camera angles and lighting better to help with getting the message across, but it was good and obvious that she was going to kill that girl

clear - no, i didn’t know what they were looking for 

Genre: Thriller/horror/mystery

Narrative: What they are looking for ?

I think they were looking for the girl to kill her it wasn’t that clear and didn’t really make sense so far but I think after you finish it and add it all the music and sound effects it will. Can’t wait to see it when it is done !

Genre: Unknown

Narrative: Wasn't too sure what they  were looking for but I thought the close ups were really effective

Clear/Not:  Some of the shots weren't very clear and unsure of genre

Genre:

Horror/thriller

Narrative/what are they looking for:

Not too sure, looking for her sister

Is it clear:

Not really but due to it not being finished that might be the reason why.

Mise-en-scene:

·      Not much lighting was used, would be good create a scary feeling

·      Low exposure

·      Good use of shots, a variety

·      Extend of the shot of the darts at the sister

·      Portrait shots – try to avoid

·      More shots of Gurman

• Grene: Thriller

Narrative

Character: Sister

What they are looking for: the other sister

Notes: Shoot everything horizontal, not in portrait. The characters and what she is looking for was quite clear. Maybe use of a darker setting can create a more suspenseful mood.